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These days, in many countries fewer and fewer want to became teacher, particularly in secondary school. what are the reason for this, and how could the proble, be solved.

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It is believed that nowadays the number of people who want to become
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 teacher in secondary school
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 decreasing in some countries.
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this
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 tendency. First of all, teacher's
salary
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 in most countries does not satisfy
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most youth,
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 the government
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 support them
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 financial rewards
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 as rewards and incentives.
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, they are more
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 about documentation work than teaching children.
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, some school directors are demanding more reports about the norms of classrooms and the school open class which
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 more time.
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, there is
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 solution
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this
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 issue.
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, the government should maintain the schools with more incentives and training courses in order to
desire of
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youngthers
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youngsters
does
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not bury seeing how their teachers do not work
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 enthusiasm. 
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,
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 programmes are the most effective way to provide teachers in experiencing with more cutting-edge technologies and foreseen knowledge.
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, it gives more perspectives in teaching students. In summary, supports by the government
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 a crucial role in the development of teachers, and
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this
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 fact, the
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 of students who want to become
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a teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 will be
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increasing
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the foreseable
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foreseable
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foreseeable
 future.

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task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples or data to illustrate the points, especially in the areas you mention work demands and incentives.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly from one idea to the next by using linking words and phrases. This will help in maintaining the flow of ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The essay addresses the issue and provides a clear introduction and conclusion. This adds to the overall clarity and effectiveness.
task achievement
You've identified two main issues (salary and workload) that are relevant to the topic, which helps in developing the argument.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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