One way to solve problem of congestion in cities is to build sky trains which run overhead rather than on or under the ground. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using this solution to solve congestion?

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Humans are fascinated with futuristic changes that might could solve some of our current problems
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as traffic in the major
cities
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. One of the most anticipated inventions is sky trains. I believe that the drawbacks of
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transportation
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method exceed its benefits. Transporting above grounds
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number
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a number
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of possible benefits.
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removing
trains
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train
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tracks from the ground will provide more space for eco-friendly transport. The
cities
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could replace these tracks with wider walking and cycling paths. The quality of life of the residents in the
cities
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will improve dramatically.
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, transporting
through
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air
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will reduce
time
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needed for travel as it overcomes
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apply
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geographical obstacles
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mountains
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as mountains
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, valleys and water bodies. It
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be denied that travelling
in
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air
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will bring a lot of benefits and improve our current problems with congestion.
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, despite these significant advantages, there are
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serious possible drawbacks that could threaten the environment. One of the disadvantages is increasing the damage to our plant and
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more pollution. To
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explain,
tarins
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trains
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will not hover as high planes, they will be closer to
ground
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the ground
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, and it's expected to feel changes in the quality of
air
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and noise levels in
cities
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.
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will increase the incidence of respiratory disease and cause hearing impairments.
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,
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suggested answer to congestion does not solve the root cause
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of
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overcrowdings
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overcrowding
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in
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, it just makes them more packed without any room to breathe fresh
air
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. In conclusion, having
air
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trains sounds appealing and might overcome current traffic problems.
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, I believe its impact on our
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environment
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will be greater and the quality of life for people will significantly deteriorate.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • alternative mode of transportation
  • densely populated
  • infrastructure
  • commuters
  • aesthetic appeal
  • futuristic skyline
  • carbon emissions
  • construction and maintenance costs
  • urban planning
  • visual pollution
  • cityscape
  • noise pollution
  • initial investment
  • feasible
  • opposition
  • privacy
  • property values
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