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The figure below shows what transportion that poeple use and the reason of car using in Edmonton.

The figure below shows what transportion that poeple use and the reason of car using in Edmonton.
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The figure below shows what
transportions
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transport
 that
poeple
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people
 use and the reason
of
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for
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car
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using
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 in Edmonton.
Overall
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,
The
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apply
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most vehicles that
reseidents
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residents
 in Edmonton use
is
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are
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 private
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car
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cars
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while
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 the fewest ones are
bus
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buses
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 and
taxi
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taxis
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 at the same proportion. Most people use
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car
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the car
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 for commuting to work, doing business, and taking children to school respectively.
It is clear that
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 people used
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car
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cars
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 the most which accounted
at
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for
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 45 per
cent
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 of
total
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the total
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 population.
While
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 the metro was the second
alternatives
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alternative
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 for transportation at 35 per
cent
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. And the most
reasons
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common reasons
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 why people used a
car
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 is reaching to their workplaces at 55 per
cent
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in contrast
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of
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to
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the
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apply
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shopping and and leisure activities
that
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which
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 were the fewest reasons at 15 percent equally. Transporting by
a
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apply
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bus and
a
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apply
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taxi got the least popularity at 10
percent
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per cent
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 equally. Taking their kid to campus and doing
businesses
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business
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 accounted for 40 per
cent
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 and 50 per
cent
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 for using
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car
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the car
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 as
vehicle
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a vehicle
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "figure" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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