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Band 5.5

the working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

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Currently, we have 5 working
days
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 and 2
days
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 for holidays. Some
people
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 suggest that weekdays could be
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 and more
days
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 for the weekend. I agree with
this
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 statement because it can decrease the
worker
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 stress
rate
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 and improve productivity
on
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during
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 the working
week
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. On the one hand, nowadays most
of
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the
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workers experience a very stressful condition, but they transform into a more emotionally stable condition if there are more
holiday
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holidays
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. It is because
people
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willing
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 to refresh their
mind
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minds
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 from the problems they figure out on weekdays and far from the computer which they
faced
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face
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 daily.
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, a highway company held a trial for 4 working
days
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,
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as
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and as
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 a result, the staff’s stress
rate
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reduce
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for
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by
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 about 50
percent
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.
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,
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a shorther
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shorther
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shorter
 working
week
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 will make
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worker
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workers
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 happier and less
stressful
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.
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,
less
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fewer
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 working
days
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leads
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lead
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 to a more productive
worker
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on
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during
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 the working
week
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. It is
happen
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due to
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 an inefficient way to manage the time for doing their responsibilities with
this
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 current phase.
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, in 2019,
a
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research from the United States mentioned that
people
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 who work 5
days
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 per
week
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 were less productive on Monday (only 20% productive time) and Friday (approximately 5% productivity), but eventually they could finish the same number of task on 4
days
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 of working.
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,
people
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 need one more holiday between those 5
days
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,
therefore
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 4 effective
days
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 of working is more productive on each day. In conclusion, the minimum working time is proposed
from
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for
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 workers,
hence
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 they could have a longer holiday. I agree with
this
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 idea because
in
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, in
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 my opinion, it could reduce the
rate
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 of stress and grow the productivity
rate
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 of the
worker
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.

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Language
Consider improving grammatical accuracy for a clearer expression of ideas. There are minor grammatical errors, such as "It is happen due to" should be "It happens due to."
Vocabulary
Try to use more varied vocabulary to enhance your writing. Some phrases are repeated, and synonyms or varied expressions could enhance readability and interest.
Structure
You have clearly introduced the topic and your position, along with summarizing your main arguments effectively in both the introduction and conclusion.
Examples
Good examples are provided to illustrate your ideas, such as the reference to the highway company trial and the 2019 US research. These examples support your claims effectively.
Organization
Your essay is logically organized with clear paragraphs and transition words, making it easy to follow your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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