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The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the percentage of
participation
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 in three variety
activities
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 namely: swimming, team sports and gym
activities
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 in a UK sports club from 1995 to 2015.
Overall
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, the three types of
activities
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 experienced different trends over the time period.
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participation
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 in team sports and gym
activities
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 rose gradually, attendance at swimming pools fell during these years. As the graph shows,
participation
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 in team sport figure started at around 30% in 1995 followed by 2000 it remained steady.
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 it increased significantly from 30% to 40% in 2010 yet, it declined steadily until it fell to just over around 33% in 2015.Regarding, attendance at gym
activities
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 began at approximately 7% followed by a small increase to around 10% in 2000.
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 their attendance experienced considerable growth to about 25% in 2010 and it continued to steady at 25% in 2015.
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, in 2015, swimming was the most popular activity in the UK, with a
participation
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 rate starting at 50%.
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, despite
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, the figure plunged to below 15% in 2010 and it remained unchanged by 2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words participation, activities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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