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The graph below shows the average daily spending of three categories of international visitors to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average daily spending of three categories of international visitors to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line chart illustrates the average
every day
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 spending of several categories of New Zealand
traveller
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travellers
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 between 1997 and 2017.
Overall
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, the graph experienced in Holiday/ Vacation
is
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shows
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a significantly
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significantly
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 upward trend from spending 190
dollars
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 in 1997 through 250
dollars
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 in 2017.
In contrast
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,
with
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Business is
fractuate
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fracture
 decreased from starting at 255
dollars
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 to end at 215
dollars
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According to
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 the charts,
it is clear that
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 daily spending of visitors in New Zealand
were
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 peaking at around
year
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the year
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 2000 to 2004.
Compare
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 to
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the year
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year
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years
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 2004 to 2016 they were
in
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at
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peak
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the peak
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of
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or
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 lowest trend. Looking at the line graph for more detail, observing in Business was majority downgrade trend by the peak of 330$ to 180$
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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