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The graph below shows the total births and the deaths in a European country from 1950 to 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and give comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the total births and the deaths in a European country from 1950 to 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and give comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 graph illustrates the rates of births and deaths throughout the years 1950 to 2050 in a European region.
Overall
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,
while
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birth
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the birth
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rate
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 experienced surges,
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death
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the death
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rate
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 stayed stable until the end of 2030
according to
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 the estimations. Looking at the data in greater detail,
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birth
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the birth
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 and
death
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rate
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rates
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 started
as
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at
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 nearly the same number, approximately 700000.
However
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, the number of
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birth
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births
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 increased
gradully
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gradually
 and peaked in 1970.
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, it started to drop slowly and hit its lowest point in 1990 with 60000
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.
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, it ascended until the middle of 2010 and stabilized. Meanwhile, it is noticeable that
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death
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the death
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rate
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raised
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rose
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 at the beginning without striking changes.
In contrast
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, a rise is expected in 2030 and future estimations suggest
a
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an
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 upward. In summary,
birth
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 rates changed more than
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 rates.
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, future predictions suggest the opposite.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, rate, death with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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