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The chart below shows the number of passengers arriving at a train station per hour across a day, and also the average price (in US Dollars) of their tickets. Write a report summarising the information. Select and describe the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the number of passengers arriving at a train station per hour across a day, and also the average price (in US Dollars) of their tickets. Write a report summarising the information. Select and describe the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart gives information about the proportion of
passengers
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 arriving at a train station every hour during the day plus the average of costs their
tickets
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 in UA
Dollars
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest
number
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 of
passengers
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 in the train station is at 12
pm
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 ,
while
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 the lowest
number
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 can be seen at 4pm ,
however
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, the
tickets
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 at peak times reach 31
dollars
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 higher price and at non-peak times 11
dollars
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 .
According to
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 the data given , at 6 am in the train station, the
number
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 of
passengers
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 reaches around 480 and the
tickets
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 cost 23
dollars
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 after that at 8 am significant increase to 690 with
tickets
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 for about 29
Dollars
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, and
then
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 decreases to half of the
number
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 at 10 Am with reduce the
tickets
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 price to 19 . at 12
pm
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, the
number
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 reaches a peak with 700
passengers
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as well
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as
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and
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 the
tickets
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31
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are 31
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dollars
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 . After that, the
number
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 starts to go down slightly at 2 and 4
pm
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 around 290/230
passengers
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 and goes up again to 670 which is close to
passengers
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 at 12
pm
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 , but the difference is the
tickets
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 are lower 11 than 31
dollars
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 .
Nevertheless
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, at 8pm, the
tickets
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 cost 22
dollars
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 which is double the previous time with 450
passengers
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 .
At the end
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 at 10
pm
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,
passengers
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 dropped to 300 with
tickets
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 18
dollars
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, tickets, dollars, number, pm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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