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Band 8.5

You are going to have a family party in a private room in a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter, say:     •     why you need to use this private room     •     what you need them to provide for the party     •     inquire about the price of the food you are ordering

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Dear Sir or Madam, I trust you are doing well. The purpose of writing
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 letter is to provide you with some information about a family party, which will be hosted in a private room at your well-known hotel. First and foremost, I would like to organize
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 party for my parents, as they are going to celebrate the silver jubilee of their wedding on the 17th of May.
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, all my near and dear ones will be attending
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 small family party.
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, I would be grateful if you could decorate
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 private room with the theme of red roses.
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, a small dance stage is
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 needed for the enjoyment.
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 a proper seating arrangement is required for everyone’s convenience. At the very least, could you please provide me with the total cost of the vegetarian food, which we ordered for around 50 people?
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, I would
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 like to add a nice wedding cake to the menu. I hope you will understand our needs and will make arrangements
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 the request. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Dhruvi Patel

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task achievement
Include more details about specific requirements for decoration or seating to strengthen your task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a single main idea and flows smoothly to the next for better coherence.
format
The letter has a clear introduction and closing, following the right formal tone.
task achievement
The purpose of the letter is stated clearly and is achieved by mentioning why the private room is needed and specific requirements for the party.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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