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In many cities there is little control on the design and the construction of new homes and office building, people can build houses in their own style . What are the advantages and disadvantages of this situation ?

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It is argued ,that the governments need to supervise the colours and the designs of new
buildings
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whereas
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littel authurity
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little authority
on
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 it nowadays in many
cities
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 .
Altough
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 people should have the freedom to
chosse
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choose
 the style and the design of their houses ,putting general rules by the governments will enhance their choices and
countribute
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contribute
 to
improve
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 the general appearance of the
cities
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 . On the one hand ,one of the main pros is allowing people to show their taste in order to reflect their own ideas and personality on the houses .
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 ,that leads to
varaity
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variety
 in the constructions and the style of
buildings
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 that provide the
cities
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 with personal and cultural imprint . On the other
hands
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,the disadvantages of not
controling
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controlling
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by
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 the government outweigh the pros .Many individuals build houses that do not
matches
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with
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the
beaty standared
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beauty standards
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 to very bad designs that eventually lead to
destroy
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 the
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cities
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city
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 view .
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 ,
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the Iraq
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Iraq
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 government have
a
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littel
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little
 control over the new
buildings
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 which leads to cityscape vandalism and loss
the
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 identity of the city day by day .Government should have
a
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general rules to organize the new
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buildings
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building
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 design in ways
do
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that do
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 not make it
loss
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the
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its
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 identity
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 , when anybody mentions any Japanese
housees
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houses
house
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 came to
the
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mind is the wood ,the sliding doors and the narrow corridor . In conclusion ,
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 each person should have the ability to
chooses
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 their house design and construction ,
follow
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following
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few
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a few
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 general taste rules will be beneficial for both the owners and the
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cities
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city's
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 aesthetics.
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