Mrs Barreet, an English-Speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help in her home for a few hours a day up to next summer Write a letter to Mrs Barreet. In your letter 1. Suggest how you could help her in her home 2. Say why you would like to do this work 3. Explain when you will and will not be available

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Hello, Mrs Barreet. Recently, I saw your advertisement that you need some help in your

home

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for a few hours someday up to next summer. I am Mrs Bonita, who lives in next block of your house. Our family has been

lived

Wrong verb form

living

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here since two years ago,

may be

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maybe

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you didn't know us. I'm really

interesting

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interested

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in helping at your

home

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, because I have been a housewife since moving here. I have a lot of free time, and

specifically

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specifically,

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I have experience with housework,

such

Linking Words

as cleaning and cooking. I'm wondering about what you need to help

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Actually, I have two kids, but they are already living separately with

parents

Correct pronoun usage

their parents

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. We had

have

Unnecessary verb

apply

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one lovely pet, but she passed away one year ago.

Therefore

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I usually stay at

home

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alone

while

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my husband goes to work.

Moreover

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, I can look after

pet

Fix the agreement mistake

pets

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and

elderly

Correct article usage

the elderly

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. If you have any questions, please send me an email. My plans next summer are, to visit my older son

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apply

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earlier in June. It will take two weeks. After

that

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that,

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I will be free and will be back in my house in the middle of June. So July I have open time

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apply

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and can help

your

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with your

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home

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. Please contact me if your schedule is clarified, I will be pleased

waiting

Wrong verb form

to wait for

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you.

Sincerley

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Sincerely

, Your neighbour Mrs Bonita

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coherence cohesion

Try to structure sentences clearly to avoid confusion, e.g., in explaining travel plans.

task achievement

Ensure correct and varied use of tenses, e.g., 'has been lived' should be 'have been living'.

task achievement

The letter covers all parts of the task, addressing the suggestions, motivations, and availability clearly.

task achievement

The tone is polite and friendly, which is suitable for this type of letter.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing of the letter are handled well, maintaining a polite and professional tone.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

221 words

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