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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information about the
production
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 levels of the main kinds of fuel,
such
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 as
petroleum
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, coal, and natural
gas
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, in the United Kingdom between 1981 and 2000.
Overall
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, the
highly
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most
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 produced fuel in all years was
petroleum
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, and with natural
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gas
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gas,
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 both experienced increasing,
while
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 coal
production
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was
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went down. To start from
outset
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the outset
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,
petroleum
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 started with approximately 90 in 1981,
while
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 coal with 80, and natural
gas
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 with below 40.
Subsequently
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, in 1984,
the
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petroleum
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production
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 rose to the end of 1984, composing 140, and stood at the same level until 1987. The
coal
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Coal
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production
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,
conversely
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, experienced a dramatic decline, composing approximately 37, and had the lowest
production
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,
however
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, after the end of 1984, has been increased to
the
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60. After the 1986, the
petroleum
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 and coal
production
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 showed fluctuation. At the same time, the
production
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 of natural
gas
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, which was approximately 38 in 1981, grew moderately over the years. By the start of 2000,
petroleum
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 was at 140, coal at 40, and natural
gas
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 at 100.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, petroleum, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • main kinds of fuel
  • time frame
  • location
  • data
  • trends
  • increase
  • decrease
  • specific data points
  • petroleum
  • nuclear fuel
  • natural gas
  • coal
  • fluctuations
  • correlations
  • patterns
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • provide
  • general summary
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