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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.

The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.
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The pie graphs give information about the proportion of
energy
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 capacity in gigawatts in 2015, and the forecasting trend for 2040.
Overall
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, the other
renewables
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energy
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 was much higher in 2015 regard
for
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 2040.
However
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, the amount of fossil fuels would be lower. To start with, the
energy
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 capacity of fossil fuels in 2015 was at 64%,
while
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foretelling
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 chart shows that fossil fuels would
be
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dramatically decrease to 44%. Other renewables that
was
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 at 23% in 2015,
in addition
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,
also
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 would
experiencing
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experience
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slightly
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 decline by the end of 2040, composing 21%, respectively.
Moreover
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, solar
energy
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, which was at 2% in 2015, would experience a skyrocket to the start of 2040, composing 18%, making up a ratio of 9:2 compared with 2015. Nuclear
energy
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 would remain at the same proportion,
while
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 wind
energy
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, which was at 5% in 2015, would moderately grow and would compose 12% by the start of 2040.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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