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The chart below gives information about European people of different age groups who went to gyms once a month or more between 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about European people of different age groups who went to gyms once a month or more between 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the proportion of Europeans going to gyms monthly or more often. The information is given to four age groups from 18 to over 45 in six timeframes from 1990 to 2010. The data shows the
overall
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 increase in interest in sport over 20 years time. Amount of youth joining gyms was most significant and grew six times over the period, followed by the 25-34 year group which increased five times. Meanwhile, sports remained less interesting to seniors over 45 and interest
raised
Verb problem
rose
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 from 5% of people doing sports to 20%,
whereas
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 a decade younger group of 35 to 44 years old, showed much better results and joining gym rate grew from 5% to 40 %. The trend for the 25-34 years group increased steadily each year by 10%,
while
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 for all the other groups the interest
fluctuates
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fluctuated
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Age group (noun): A range of ages categorized together.
  • Gym attendance (noun): The act of visiting or using a gym.
  • Trend (noun): A general direction in which something is developing or changing.
  • Decline (verb/noun): A decrease or loss in quality, quantity, or importance.
  • Fluctuate (verb): To change continually; to move up and down.
  • Peak (noun/verb): Reach the highest point.
  • Demographics (noun): Statistical data relating to the population and particular groups within it.
  • Health awareness (noun): Being conscious or informed about health issues.
  • Fitness culture (noun): A culture that promotes physical exercise and healthy living.
  • Stabilize (verb): To make or become unlikely to change or fluctuate.
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