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The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.
The given line chart depicts the number of the rate of
sales
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 of gold in Dubai
during
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from
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 January to December
by
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apply
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2002.
Overall
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, despite the fluctuation during the entire year, the amount of
sales
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 at the start and
at the end
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 of
period
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the period
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 were roughly similar. The
sales
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 hit
its
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their
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 peak in March and bottom out around July and September. Skyrocketing from 200
million
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Dirhams
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 in January, the amount of
sales
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 reached its peak
about
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of about
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 350
million
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Dirhams
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 in March. After that, it fell dramatically until April, where it bottomed out around just above 110
million
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Dirhams
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 in July.
This
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 trend was mirrored by the value of gold sold
during
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 July to September, albeit at a lesser proportion, rising from about 110
million
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Dirhams
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 to just above 200
million
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Dirhams
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 before falling back to around 120
million
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Dirhams
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.
Following
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this
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, the amount of
sales
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 saw only
the
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a
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 moderate rise and almost plateaued from October to the end of the year, having the total
sales
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 of approximately 190
million
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Dirhams
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, million, dirhams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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