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You want to join a new gym in your neighbourhood. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter ask what types of membership are available, and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the joining procedure is

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Dear Manager I hope
this
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massage
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 finds you
good
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in good
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 spirits. My name is Shahzoda and I am
new
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a new
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 dweller in the neighborhood. I have newly detected your respected private
sports
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club
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 and I am keen to become a
membership
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. The basis for my interest in your
sports
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club
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originate
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 from my enthusiasm for fitness and
sports
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. I
price
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offer
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 the opportunity to participate in physical activities, socialize with colleagues, and maintain a healthy lifestyle, all of which your
club
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 seems to propose. I would really value it if you could
ensure
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 me with some information touching the facilities available at the
club
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 , including the extent of
sport
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sports
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 activities and
apparatus
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the apparatus
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 provided.
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Moreover
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 I am inquisitive about the membership options, any supplementary costs,
as well as
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 the
clubs
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club's
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 operating hours and any exclusive membership requirements. Your immediate response to these matters would be very helpful in making
informed
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 decision about joining your
sports
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club
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. I sincerely appreciate your consideration of my questions, and I am
helpfull
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helpful
 for the possibility of becoming a member of your
honored
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 establishment. Yours faithfully Shahzoda

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single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for clarity and better coherence.
logical structure
Refine the letter's structure to maintain a logical flow throughout the text. Some ideas appear scattered.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal, fitting the context of the letter.
suitable writing tone
Polite and formal tone maintained throughout the letter, suitable for addressing a gym manager.
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