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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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According to
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 the graphics, we can see the
production
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 levels of three of the main fuels not only in
UK
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the UK
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, the window of
this
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 report is 1981 to 2000. The Petroleum, the blue
line
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, all
time
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the time
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 has been above with two peaks, the first one between 1984 and 1987, the second one after 1995 and
according to
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 the graph it was a
constat
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constant
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 probably
beyod
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beyond
 2000. The
maximun
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maximum
 for
Pretroleum
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Petroleum
 was 140
energy
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units
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aproximately
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approximately
.
According
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 the Natural gas, the
discontinous
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discontinuous
 orange
line
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, for 1981
has
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had
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 40
energy
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units
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 and it
was
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growing
until
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to
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 100
energy
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units
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at
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in
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year
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the year
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 2000. Their
producction
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production
pass
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passes
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 the coal
production
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arround
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around
 1991. The Natural gas is constant in the first part of the chart but later the slope of the
line
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 goes up. It is possible
according
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according to
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 a forecast that the
production
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 of it pass the petroleum in a few couple of
year
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years
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 in future.
Finally
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 Coal
the
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is the
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 grey
line
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, It is
clearly
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clear
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 that the
production
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had decreasing
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has decreased
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with
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over
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 the years.
In
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 the beginning with
a
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apply
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80 points of
energy
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units
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an
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and
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 later a
production
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of arround
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arround
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around
an
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apply
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half of it.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, line, energy, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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