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Band 5

.You have joined a new job recently. Write to your friend about your new job. In your letter •describe the reason for quitting the previous job •show your excitement for a new job and other details •say about your salary package

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Dear harjit, How are you , I
was
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have been
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 trying to reach out
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to
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you
from
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for
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Linking Words
last
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the last
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 few days but have been hectic with
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the
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onboarding
facilties
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facilities
 of
new
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my new
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job
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. yes, you heard it right. I quit my previous
job
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 due
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to inffective
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inffective
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ineffective
 personal and
proffesional
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professional
growth and being monotonous. I am feeling ecstatic to tell you about my new
job
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 as you already know my keen
of
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apply
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intrest
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interest
with
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in
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 teaching so
i
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I
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 have accepted the offer from Cambridge
high school
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High School
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. I have always wanted
this
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job
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 eagerly it's like
dream
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a dream
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comes
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come
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 true. Even though to join
this
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job
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 I would have to travel long
distance
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distances
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but
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apply
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exitment
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excitement
 being
teacher
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a teacher
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it
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apply
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did not even bother
to
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apply
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me .
Although
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 my previous
job
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 as a truck driver
has
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had
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a
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big salary package
but
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apply
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this
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 is a passion for me so I accepted the package of
5 k
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5k
 monthly with 20 days of
voccation
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vacation
vocation
vaccination
 yearly. can't wait to tell you more about
this
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 face to face see you soon.
your
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you're
you are
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 loving, Amarpreet .

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coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs to focus more clearly on single ideas. For example, separate the reasons for leaving your previous job from the details of your new job.
task achievement
Check for spelling and grammar errors such as 'ineffective', 'interest', 'excitement', etc.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are warm and friendly, appropriate for a letter to a friend.
task achievement
Your passion for the new job is clearly conveyed, which adds a genuine tone to the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • resignation
  • career growth
  • fulfilling
  • work-life balance
  • opportunities
  • enthusiastic
  • dynamic
  • company culture
  • supportive management
  • responsibilities
  • role
  • salary package
  • competitive
  • benefits
  • financial stability
  • bonuses
  • job security
  • earnings growth
  • quitting
  • new position
  • colleagues
  • mentorship
  • career goals
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