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The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. ZHa

The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. ZHa
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of international
graduates
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 from six UK
universities
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 like
Cambridge
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,
Oxford
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, Bath, Bristol, Cardiff, and
London
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 between 2000-2015.
Overall
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, there are six
universities
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 with worldwide ex-students whose number went up significantly,
however
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,
Cambridge
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,
Oxford
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 and
London
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universities
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university
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 students were leaders among other academies. In 2000,
Cambridge
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 had the largest proportion of overseas
graduates
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, accounting for about 15%, and in 2015 it went up to 25%,
while
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London
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 had the lowest, with just around 5% in 2000, meanwhile in 2015 it grew up to 20%.
Oxford
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 followed
Cambridge
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 in 2000.
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, by 2015,
Oxford
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 experienced the most significant increase, reaching approximately 25%, which makes the university with the highest percentage of international
graduates
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.
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, Cardiff 10% to 14% and Bath
also
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 showed notable growth
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% - 13%. Meanwhile, Bristol had the smallest increase in international
graduates
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 over the 15-year period with 7% in 2015. So, only Bristol had the lowest percentage of multinational ex-students, meanwhile,other
universities
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such
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 as
Oxford
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,
Cambridge
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 and
London
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 were the highest.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, universities, cambridge, oxford, london with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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