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The bar chart shows average years individuals in different age groups (25-35,35-45) can stay in one job in Europe and the USA between 1990 and 2015.

The bar chart shows average years individuals in different age groups (25-35,35-45) can stay in one job in Europe and the USA between 1990 and 2015.
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The bar chart gives information about groups of ages 25 , 35 , and 35. 45 who remain in the same only one
job
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 in
Europe
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 and the USA in the period between 1990 and 2015 .
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 most
people
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 stayed on the
job
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 in
Europe
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 for all groups of ages ,
while
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 the least could be seen in the USA .
according to
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 the data given, in1990, individuals who are 25- 35 tended to stay in their
job
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 in
Europe
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 the average year around 5
years
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 and by 2000 the number decreased to 4
years
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 ,
in contrast
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,
people
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 whom 35 -45 stayed around 7
years
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 in their workplace and
then
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 rose to 6
years
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 . With regard to the
,
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 USA the majority of
people
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 who stayed in one
job
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 was in 1990 the age between 35- 45 , and by 2000 the number declined to 5
years
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 , which was lower than
people
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 in
Europe
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 , regarding
people
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 in 25 -35 the numbers of
years
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 was 4 in 1990 , which was in the same level of
Europe
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 in 2000 , and
then
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 ripped to 3
years
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 in 2000

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Vocabulary: Replace the words job, europe, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average years
  • age groups
  • job tenure
  • bar chart
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • trend
  • cultural factors
  • economic factors
  • job stability
  • career development
  • implications
  • regional differences
  • occupational mobility
  • workforce
  • employment patterns
  • time frame
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