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The pie chart shows the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarise and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarise and make comparisons where relevant.
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The main causes people migrated to and from the UK are recorded in these pie charts. Units are measured in the percentage of total data
source
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Overall
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, a definite job seems to be the biggest
reasoning
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reason
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 that triggers individuals to go in and out
the
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 country, sitting at 30% for immigration and 29% for emigration.
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, the smallest group of people who
immigrate
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immigrated
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 stated no apparent reason for
this
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 particular life choice,
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 the fewer portion of the civilians who emigrate were least likely
made
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 their decision because of a formal study matter.
Meanwhile
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 in the first group, a formal study opportunity and
accompany
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 reasons are ranked second and third with their percentages of 26% and 15%.
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, the second and first bottom layers are looking for work and other causes, noted at 12% and 11%.
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, folks searching for jobs and other reasons occupy
the
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apply
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rank
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ranks
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 number two and three with 22% and 14%.
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, there were 18% of citizens who didn't tell their exact reasons, and there
were
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 another 13% who went out of the UK as a company to their relatives.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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