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The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010. Umar

The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010. Umar
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The two bar charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 information about the spending of two countries
in
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 consumer goods in pound sterlings in 2010 .
Overall
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,in
a
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both
section
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section,
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 the most
expenditure
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 was a car .
While
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 the lowest
expenditure
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 for
France
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 was cameras , for
UK
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 perfume.Totally the
UK
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 spent more money
to
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on
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 consumer goods .
The
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apply
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France
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 paying out for computers consumers
around
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are around
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 370,000
thousands
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thousand
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Linking Words
that
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which
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 is more than
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the UK
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UK
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UK's
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 exactly 350,000 .
Nevertheless
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,in another section
expenditure
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 significantly
surpass
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in
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apply
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outlay .The
UK
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 pay more attention
for
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to
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 cars spending 450,000 pounds sterling. Cameras and
computer
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computers
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representing
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represent
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almost
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the most
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expenditure
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all expenditure
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 ,
computer
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computers
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overtake
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take
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 more than 350,000 and for books
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UK
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the UK
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 take
a
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apply
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money approximately more than 400,000
thousands
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thousand
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.
The
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apply
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France
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 spent noticeably less than
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UK
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the UK
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 .A peak for
France
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 was cars over 400,000 . Little
less
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least
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of consume
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consumed
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 goods in
France
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was
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were
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 computers less than 400,000
pound
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pounds
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 sterling on
other
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the other
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 hand money for cameras
had
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apply
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taken 150,000 showing the lowest result between
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UK
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the UK
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anf
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and
France
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 .

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, france, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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