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Band 3

Some people think it’s better to choose friend s who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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friends who
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 of thinking because the persons cannot think one point of view
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people with similar nubs have a scope to go
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 the bond stronger between them.
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conclusion, Having friends with different opinions makes
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people strong to believe
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 its boosts their confidence to reach heights in their
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coherence cohesion
Enhance your logical structure by organizing your ideas into paragraph forms to discuss each viewpoint and your own opinion succinctly.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support each viewpoint elaborately, as your examples seem too general.
coherence cohesion
Good attempt at presenting an introduction and conclusion, which provides a framework for your argument.
task achievement
You have demonstrated a willingness to consider both perspectives, which adds depth to your essay.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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