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The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. N.

The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. N.
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The graph below illustrates the proportion of global graduates from Great Britain
universities
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 in 2000 and 2015.
Overall
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, there are six
universities
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London
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, Cardiff, Bristol, Bath ,
Oxford
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 and
Cambridge
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 which all experienced a dramatic improvement over the whole period. Meanwhile,
London
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,
Oxford
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 and
Cambridge
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 had the highest quantity of overseas bachelor holders in comparison with the rest of other categories. Looking at the details, there were three
universities
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 which had huge differences in percentage
such
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London
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,
Oxford
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 and
Cambridge
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. In 2000,
Oxford
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 and
Cambridge
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 had approximately 15 % and
at the end
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 of 2015
Oxford
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 reached
to
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25% and
Cambridge
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 rose significantly to 23%,
however
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,
London
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surpass
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 both of them. International graduates of
London
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university
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 jumped from 5% to 20%.
Additionally
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,
another
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another university
other universities
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universities
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 like
,
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 Cardiff, Bristol and Bath
also
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 increased but not as
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London
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much London
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,
Oxford
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 and
Cambridge
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. All of them had a little change in
percent
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per cent
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 of students. Cardiff and Bath had similar
difference
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differences
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, both of them soared gradually above 4%.
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, Bristol's increased
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for
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3%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words universities, london, oxford, cambridge with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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