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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many
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 believe that during
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 not concerned with the main
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. Some
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 would like to focus only on their main
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 the major that they chose when they decided to enter the
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. I believe that the
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subjects
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 in the
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 it is a good chance for them to experience some new
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. Most universities in Thailand have an option subject for their
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 has many optional
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 for
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 to choose especially for freshmen. One of the main reasons that they provide the other
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 is
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 will not get too much stress with the main one, or they can choose other
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 that are easier and support their GPA.
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, there are some
students
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 who do not want to
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 opportunity
classes
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. They believe that main
subjects
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 are the first priority and choose to focus on that.
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 as one of my friends at
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,
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 results were very efficient , particularly in our major
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.
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 the
university
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 forced all
students
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 to choose some
alternative
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subjects
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 and she was not enjoying all the optional
classes
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.She said she wanted to focus only subject of our major
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 she needed to
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 the topics that she did not want. In conclusion, there are many
students
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 who prefer to
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alternative
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subjects
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 during
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 rather than only their major
subjects
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.
On the other hand
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, some
students
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 prefer to
study
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 only their main
subjects
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 because it is the
subjects
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 that they are intend in. In the future, I believe that all universities will still have
alternative
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classes
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 because their
students
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 will not only pay attention to the main
subjects
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 but have a chance to learn new things which they did not expect before.

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task achievement
Clarify your opinion in the introduction and restate it more prominently in the conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences to improve the logical flow of your paragraphs.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points, particularly regarding the benefits of alternative subjects.
coherence and cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structure and using more sophisticated vocabulary to enhance coherence.
task achievement
You've addressed both views on the topic, which is key to a balanced discussion.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and restates your opinion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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