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The chart below give information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summaries information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The chart below give information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summaries information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about the average weekly spending by families in one nation, in the
year
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years
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 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, basic necessities
such
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 as food, fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
, and personal were the major
expenditure
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expenditures
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 50 years ago. Evidently, in the year 1968, food
has
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had
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 the majority spending share at 35%, followed by clothing and
footware
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footwear
 at 10% each.
While
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 food
and
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apply
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clothing and footwear significantly
decrease
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decreased
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 in 2018 at about 17% and 5% respectively, housing and other less spending activities and properties
gain
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gained
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 more expenses. With leisure being the most spending at around 23% approximately. Seconded by housing, at slightly less than 20%.
While
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 there has been a variation in spending among the
families
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family's
families'
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 income, household goods remain unchanged in the two years (1968 and 2018) at a percentage of around 18%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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