The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
Australian
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males
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and females participating in doing routine exercises across various
age
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groups in 2010. It is obvious that
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women participate in typical physical exercise more than men in
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groups 25 to 65 and over.
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, the most different ratio in doing regular physical activity compared between
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and females is
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group
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35 to 44.
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, the percentage of the
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group
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15 to 24 men engaged in doing exercise more than female.
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, the
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group
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65 and over had proportions similar between
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and females.
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,
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women who participated in physical activity
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in the
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group
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45 to 54 at 53%.
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,
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women in the
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group
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65 and over had the lowest percentage at 48%.
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, the highest ratio of
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men doing regular physical activity in the
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group
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15 to 24 at 52%.
On the other hand
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, the lowest ratio of
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is
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group
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35 to 44 at 39.5%. In conclusion, the female population in Australia regularly works out more than
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in all
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groups except in the
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group
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15 to 24.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, males, age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • physical activity
  • age groups
  • engagement
  • demographics
  • decline
  • gender gap
  • regular exercise
  • younger ages
  • middle age
  • older age
  • highest and lowest participation
  • comparative analysis
  • trends
  • illustrate
  • significantly
  • evident
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