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The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below provides information about the people who rode bicycles by age
of
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apply
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groups
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group
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 in
one two
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one-two
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.
Measurede
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Measured
 in percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that the population in 0-9
group
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 are the highest in
both
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 genders. And the people in
40
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the 40
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group
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 are the lowest in
both
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 genders.
According to
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 what is shown, the
group
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 includes bicycle riders from 0-9
year
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years
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 is higher than other age
groups
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. It was 52.5 per
cent
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.
And the
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The
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 second
group
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 from 10-19 females about 43.6 per
cent
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. And female bicycle
rider
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riders
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 in
both
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groups
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 20-39 and 40-59. 18.2 and 13.7 respectively. The male bicycle riders in the youngest
group
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 from 0-9
is
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are
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 the highest than other
men
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male
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 players in other
groups
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. They are 51.2 per
cent
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. And from 10-
19
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19,
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men's
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men
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 are 25.1 per
cent
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.
Both
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groups
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 20-39 and 40-59
is
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are
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 the lowest with
one
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a one
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 per
cent
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 gap. 10.9 and 9.3 respectively. The
bothe
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both
 genders in the
last
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group
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 from 60 years and above is not high. In the female
group
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 19.8 per
cent
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, and in the men's
group
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 19.6
percentages
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per cent
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, group, both, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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