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Writing Samples
Band 3

Some people use social media to keep in touch with other people and new events. Do you think advantages of this technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is argued that social
media
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 has been playing a significant role in
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communication skills between people. The question is, what
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 the main merits and demerits of social
media
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this
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 essay, I am going to discuss
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, one
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major benefit
 of new technology is
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 easy connection. To explain,
today
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 population who travel
other
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country become
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 to able connect with friends or family, they don't need to pay money for
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 or taxes to
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 them.
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research
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 to increase
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a
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 rate of user social
media
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 in the world
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 90 %,
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according to
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 statistics a few numbers of people don't use
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 technology
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 present.
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media
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 the other hand, there are a number of
disadvantage
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 of social
media
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 can not allow
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to see their son face to face because
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new generation
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 social
media
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achieve
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a
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communication among families,
as a
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result
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 the parents often meet their children
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in
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 occasion.
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, in America, the rate of parent who met their children
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 special
occasion
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 at 65 %. In conclusion, social
media
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 have both
side
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 positive
or
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 negative. It could be
advantage
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such
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sheaper
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cheaper
 method to connect with
other
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others
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 or
disadvantage
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a disadvantage
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such
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make
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luck
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relationship
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 with families.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your thesis and outlines the main points you will discuss in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use varied sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance the readability and engagement of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly link your ideas and points together to improve the overall flow of your essay.
task achievement
You have identified both advantages and disadvantages of social media, which is important for a balanced argument.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social media platforms
  • instant communication
  • real-time updates
  • global connectivity
  • community engagement
  • misinformation
  • mental health impacts
  • cyberbullying
  • productivity loss
  • virtual relationships
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