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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the table
present
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presents
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 information about the total number of
inmigrants
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immigrants
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 to Australia, New Zeland,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and the United States that
are
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were
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 in a temporary job status
during
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between
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 2003 and 2006,
also
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 to have a
sence
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sense
to
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of
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 how much of the total population of each country
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this
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these
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 numbers represent, it gives a per 1000 people in 2006. It is interesting to note that The United States had the largest number of
this
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 type of workers in 2003
was
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apply
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577,000 which increased by 100,00 for the next date.
However
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, for every thousand
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citizens
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citizen
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citizen,
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 only 2.3 are provisional overseas employees.
In contrast
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, New
Zeland
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Zealand
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 had the lowest quantity
that
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apply
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after adding only 22,000 to the previous date reached
a
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apply
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87,000 by 2006 which made
a
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apply
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21.1 for every 1000 of the population, the biggest per cap numbers.
Overall
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, it
is explicitly observe
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is explicitly observed
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 that The United Kingdom was the only one that almost
double
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doubled
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figures
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the figures
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 after the
3 years
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3-year
 laps.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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