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Band 4.5

Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familer with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

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Some
perple
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people
 prefer to explore new
things
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 as visiting new
plases
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places
 and try to different
food
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,
while
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other
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others
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 prefer to do
things
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 that they are aware of
things
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. they do not go out
their
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of their
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 comfort zone. In my opinion, trying new
things
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 gives exposure to the
cuiture
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culture
 and
people
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. On the
first
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other
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 side, exploring different
plased
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places
 gives you
knowaledge
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knowledge
 about history. Visiting different
places
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 and exploring
variety
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 of historical
monument
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 provide information
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knowledge
 that how
people
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 used to live in the past.
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, exploring new
food
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 items not only
ehance
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enhances
 the
tase
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taste
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 but
also
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 helps us to understand their
food
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 culture.
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, I recently went to Italy. I tested their famous Pizza and visited to oldest church that experience gave me to help to explore Italian
food
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 culture and
oldest
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places
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. On the second side, some
people
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 prefer to explore their comfort familiar place. Individuals think it is
a
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west of money to go out
places
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,
try
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and try
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to
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apply
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new
food
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taste
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tastes
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 it is
a
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an
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unncessary
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unnecessary
necessary
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things
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thing
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 that's why they do not go
to
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apply
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out of
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cities or costly
food
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plases
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places
.
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, one of my Uncle do not go to the
Cines
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Cine
 and Korean restaurants for dinner or party, they would prefer to
home made
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homemade
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food
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. He
think
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,
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 it is a modern negative craze to go
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to coslty
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coslty
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costly
 hotels which can lose your money. To
conculde
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conclude
, some
people
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 would not like to visit out of
places
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 like Historical
places
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 or try to
defferent
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different
food
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 items.
However
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, I believe that individuals should prefer to explore new
places
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 and
food
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 because it can
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your
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their
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knowaledge
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knowledge
 about different
food
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culture
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cultures
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 and
people
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.

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language
Improve spelling and grammar throughout the essay. For example, 'perple' should be 'people', 'plases' should be 'places', and 'cuiture' should be 'culture'.
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Make sure to use clear and varied sentence structures to enhance readability and engagement.
content
Provide more specific examples in both sides of the argument to support your points more effectively, such as different cultures or food items related to personal experiences.
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Clarify your points by providing reasons or explanations for why some people avoid trying new things and why this matters. This can improve the depth of your argument.
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You presented both sides of the argument and shared your opinion, which is important for a balanced discussion.
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You included personal experiences, which helps to make your points more relatable and engaging.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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