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The chart below shows the percentages of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentages of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides key information about the
comparative
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 between families who owned
homes
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 and families who rented
homes
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 in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. The data
measured
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is measured
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 in
persentages
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percentages
.
Overall
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, It is clear from the graph that people in rented
houses
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have
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had
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 the biggest proportion in 1918,
later
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which later
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 decreased constantly.
In addition
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, individuals who rented
houses
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deceased
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decreased
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 significantly
whereas
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, those who owned
houses
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 increased over the period.
According to
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 what is shown,
renters
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renter
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 households have the dominant figures nearly 78% in 1918.
Afterward
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 it dropped nearly 10% in 1939 and continued to fall to around 59% in 1961. In 1971, the percentages of
owners
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owners'
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 and
renters
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renters'
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houses
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 had equivalent rates at 50%
in
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apply
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1971. After
decade
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a decade
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,
familes
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families
 in rented
houses
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 reached
to
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apply
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two-fifth
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two-fifths
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. Families renting
homes
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 reached
to
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apply
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around 38 in 2011.
Acording
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According
 to what is shown, individuals who owned
homes
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 began to around a fifth
percent
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per cent
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 in 1918,
then
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 jumped to about doubled in 1961. people owned house rose considerably at 60% in 1981. In 2001, people owned
homes
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 reached a peak of approximately 69%. In the end, households in owned
houses
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 declined slightly to almost 37%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words homes, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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