The chart below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relavant.

The chart below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relavant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relavant.
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The pie chart illustrates different percentages of meals in three categories: Sodium, Saturated fat and added
sugar
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for each part of the day.
Overall
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, as can be seen,
dinner
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had a significant peak of the day.
while
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breakfast
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and
snacks
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received the lowest percentages.
However
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,other items had vireos figures.
To begin
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with, sodium in the
dinner
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looked bigger
number
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than in other pies.
In addition
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, there is a middle of people spending sodium on the launch around
third
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apply
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.
However
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, there are similar percentages between
breakfast
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and
Snacks
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14% .
In contrast
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, Saturated fat in
dinner
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had
dominant
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a dominant
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point of 37% more than in lunch at 26%.
Finally
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, people who
spending
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snacks
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and
breakfast
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are nearly the same
number
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from 16% to 21%.
On the other hand
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, the highest
number
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in
Sugar
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portions is
snacks
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around 42 per cent.
However
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, there is a middle
number
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of people who love added
sugar
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in
dinner
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parts they spend around 23%.
Finally
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,there are a few parts of the day added
sugar
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in the
breakfast
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and lunch from 16 to 19%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, however".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, dinner, breakfast, snacks, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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