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The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graphs illustrate the total proportion of
films
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 released and the
percentage
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 of
ticket
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sales
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 in a country for the years 1996 and 2006. The vertical axis represents the total
percentage
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 of
films
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 released,
while
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 the horizontal axis represents the types of movie genres, including
Drama
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, Comedy, Fantasy, and Romance.
Overall
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,
Drama
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films
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 consistently had the highest
percentage
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 of
releases
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, increasing from 27% in 1996 to 35% in 2006.
Ticket
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sales
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 for
Drama
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,
however
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, were approximately 16% in 1996, with a slight increase to around 17% in 2006. Comedy
films
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 stood in the second position after
Drama
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, with
releases
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 rising from 20% in 1996 to 25% in 2006. The Romance genre had the lowest
percentage
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 of
releases
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 among all categories, maintaining the same
percentage
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 in both years. Fantasy
films
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 saw considerable growth in
releases
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, increasing from around 3% in 1996 to 7% in 2006.
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, when it comes to
ticket
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sales
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, Comedy peaked among all genres, with
ticket
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sales
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 exceeding 20% in 1996 and nearly 25% in 2006.
While
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Drama
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films
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 had the highest number of
releases
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, their
ticket
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sales
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 were lower, increasing slightly from 16% to 17% over the decade. Fantasy and Romance genres accounted for less than 7% of
ticket
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sales
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 in both years, indicating comparatively lower popularity among audiences.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words films, percentage, ticket, sales, drama, releases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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