THE BAR CHART BELOW GIVES INFORMATION ABOUT THE NUMBER OF STUDENTS STUDYING COMPUTER SCIENCE AT A UK university between 2010 and 2012. Summarise the info by selecting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

THE BAR CHART BELOW GIVES INFORMATION ABOUT THE NUMBER OF STUDENTS STUDYING COMPUTER SCIENCE AT A UK university between 2010 and 2012. Summarise the info by selecting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts
shows
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information about the
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amount
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of pupils who studying computer science in
United
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the United
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Kingdom from 2010 to 2012.
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, the
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chart
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illustrates the difference between British home
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student
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students
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as well as
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overseas
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student
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students
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.it
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that the figures of men and women of the
Uk
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UK
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home
student
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was
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the most popular.
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,
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foreign
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students were
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popular
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women
whereas
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rose gradually in the chart of men.
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with, the number of male
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international students was around 20 in the year 2010,
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it started to
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dramatically to reach to higher point in the year 2012 .
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the rate of British home
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student
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students
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has been increasing to
made
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up
an
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approximately 40 after that the rate suddenly dropped to record just under 25
then
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it recovered to reach the
heightest
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highest
level
of
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on
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chart
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in 2012.
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,
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the fame's
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fame's
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rate of house
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student
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students
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in 2010 was bigger than overseas students during
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of
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period . International
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student
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students
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of women began
rose
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slowly to reach
to
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20 in the year 2012.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words student with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • breakdown
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
  • spike
  • drop
  • percentage change
  • overall
  • noteworthy
  • observations
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
  • highlight
  • significant
  • summarize
  • gender analysis
  • male students
  • female students
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