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The charts below show the usage of coal, oil, hydropower, wind and renewable energy for fuel production, in 2002 and at present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the usage of coal, oil, hydropower, wind and renewable energy for fuel production, in 2002 and at present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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usage of coal, oil, hydropower, wind, and renewable energy as a source of fuel production in France through two years ( 1990 and 2010) to use it for electricity. It is clear from the chart that in France there are
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numerous origins of fuel which
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essentioal
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essential
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Nuclear power had the highest rate ( 67%) for electric power
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others;
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, in 1990 the greatest rate
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 achieved by coal and natural gas and it is about 28%.
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hydro power
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 had reached the lowest number
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 6% in 1990 and 2% in 2010.
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, in 2010
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 score in coal and oil which
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 about 13%.
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 the draw demonstrates the rapid decrease
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 the usage of coal between the two years.
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 we can say that it is important to use renewable energy for making electricity.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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