You rent a four-bedroom house which you share with two other students. However, there are several problems with this house that need fixing. You also find it expensive and would like to find another student to share the spare bedroom. Write a letter to the estate agency. In the letter: - Explain your situation -Describe the problem with the house -Say what would you like to happen

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that there are several problems in a rented house, those need to be solved.
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,
due to
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some financial difficulties, we want to keep one more student in the spare room.
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, there are numerous problems, among the main one is the gas heater is not working properly.
As a result
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, we
order
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have ordered
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the
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apply
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food from
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the restaurant
a restaurant
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restaurant
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restaurants
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from
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in
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last
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the last
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three days, which is very expensive.
Also
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, The plumber's work needs to be done, because
pipeline
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the pipeline
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of the bathroom shower is broken, so we cannot take a shower.
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, I would like you to arrange any professional at your own expense.
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, find someone who can stay with us in sharing the living room and the kitchen.
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, I look forward to hearing from your response. Yours faithfully, Prabhjot Kaur

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task response
Consider elaborating on the financial difficulties to provide a clearer context for your situation. This would enhance your explanation and give the estate agency a better understanding of your needs.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more transition words to improve the flow of your letter. This can help in connecting your ideas and making your argument more compelling.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread your letter to correct small grammatical issues, like the use of 'those' instead of 'that' in your opening sentence.
task response
You clearly stated the problems with the house, which is important for the estate agency's understanding of your situation.
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Your tone is polite and appropriate for a letter to an estate agency, which is an important aspect of effective communication.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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