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The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the percentage of people who went cycling in one town in 2011.
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, females showed bigger proportions in all
age
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 categories compared to their male counterparts.
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, the youngest
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 groups exhibited much higher
numbers
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, regardless of their gender. Focusing on the bigger
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first,
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little over
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half of the youngest
age
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 group rode bicycles, with a small disparity in
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 between girls and boys, at 51.4% and 50.3% respectively. There was,
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, a much more noticeable discrepancy in the figures when it comes to the next
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 bracket, where/in which 42.2% of girls engaged in cycling compared to 24.6% of boys.
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, only a small proportion of the adult population went cycling in
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 town.
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 17.1% of women from the 18-39
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 range rode a bike, the figure was considerably less for their male counterparts, with 9.7%. Women and men aged between 40 and 59 showed even smaller
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, with their respective figures standing at 12.3% and 8.0%. As for the oldest population, they recorded the third-highest figures as 18.5% of females engaged in riding a bicycle, which was higher than the proportion of male cyclists, with 13.2%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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