The graph shows the number of deaths caused by terrorist attacks in three countries between 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of deaths caused by terrorist attacks in three countries between 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph shows the number of deaths caused by terrorist attacks in three countries between 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph
illustrate
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that the number of citizens
had
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died
due to
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terrorist
attactks
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attacks
in three countries between 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, it can
be see
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from the graph that the highest
people
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number of people
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had
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died in Iraq,
while
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second
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highest country was Nigeria, there were more
fluctuatuations
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fluctuations
occurred
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in Afghanistan and Nigeria.
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, Iraq had
rose
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with 3000 people in 2011, it reduced around by 2000 in 2012 which
was
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dramatically reached up to around 10000 in 2014
then
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badly reduced by 7000 in 2015.
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, the second highest country was Nigeria which started by 3000 it rapidly went up around 8000,
then
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reduced by 5000 in 2015.
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, Afghanistan was the lowest among all three countries. it is
notisable
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noticeable
it started with
arond
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around
3000, it reduced
2000
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in 2012
then
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gradually increased by 5000 in 2015.
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, the people were safe in
Afganistan
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Afghanistan
more
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than two countries.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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