The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph shows the average percentage of
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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who passed the driving test in one of the Asian
region
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from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that more women passed the driving exam than
men
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.throughout the period. The highest number of women who passed the exam was in 2000,
whereas
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in 1980 was the lowest for
men
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.
Furthermore
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, the number of passers of males remained steady for the
last
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ten years. In terms of gender, 48% of females passed the driving test in 1980 and rose modestly to approximately 51% in 1990.
Furthermore
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, the average
percentages
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percentage
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of women showed a considerable
increased
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increase
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in 2000 at about 69%;
although
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, it slightly declined
at
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to
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abouto
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about
65% in 2010.
In contrast
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, the proportion of
men
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who
tookpassed
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passed
the drivering exam in 1980
were
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about 29%,
modestly
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which modestly
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rosegrew
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grew
to 38% in 1990.
Moreover
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, the number of
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men
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male
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passers remained stable at approximately 49% from 2000 to 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
Vocabulary: Replace the words men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "modestly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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