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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compararions where releavant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compararions where releavant.
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This
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 chart provides key information about how much
did
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families pay for live affairs every week in two different years. The units are measured in percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that both years had various
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.
In addition
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,
food
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the food
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 trend was the top kind which people paid for in 1968,
whereas
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the
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leisure was the most
thing
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important thing
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 in 2018.
According to
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 what is shown, people spent too much money on food about 35 per cent
from
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of
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 their income in 1968
compare
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compared
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 with almost 18
percent
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per cent
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 in 2018.
However
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, the figure showed an
increese
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increase
of
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in
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 housing
expensesin
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expenses in
expenses
 2018 to about 19
percent
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per cent
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 which was 10 in 1968. Fuel and power were
from
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apply
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the lowest things in the two years.
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, clothing and
footware
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footwear
 experienced a
decreese
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decrease
 in 2018 and in 1968 were approximately 10
percent
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per cent
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. In terms of the
others
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other
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 things,
households
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household
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 goods remained steady in 2018 and 1968.
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, personal goods spending was the same proportion of
households
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household
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 goods in 1968 and plunged down about 3% in 2018.
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, transport and leisure had more expenses in 2018 than 1968.

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