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Band 2.5

The data below shows who owns Greek Sovereign debt.

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The two diagrams show
the
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information
of
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Greek
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 sovereign debts; one represents different
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bondholders
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 and the other displays the exposure of
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11 European nations, indicated with
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euros
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.
Overall
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,
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Greek
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Greece
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 owes
Eurozone
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the Eurozone
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 the most among all of the
bond holders
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bondholders
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,
whereas
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that
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of
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Greek
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the Greek
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bank
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banks
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is
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 the least.
However
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, it is interesting to note that Germany
offer
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 monetary support the most and Portugal the fewest. It is noticeable that
majority
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 of
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Greek’s
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Greece’s
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 debt
owe
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 to
Eurozone
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the Eurozone
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 at 193
billion
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euros
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, followed by clothes bond
holder
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holders
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 and IMF at 48
billion
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euros
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 and
at
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32
billion
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euros
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, respectively.
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 ECB is twice as much
of
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Greek
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bank
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banks
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 at 20 and 10, it is slightly larger than that of other lenders only 3
billion
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euros
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. In regards to each Eurozone member
states
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state
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,
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Greek
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Greece
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 owes the highest from Germany at 56,473
billion
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euros
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whereas
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that
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of
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Portugal only around 1,000
billion
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euros
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. There are four prominent countries that lend
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Greek
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Greece
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the
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money
are
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France, Italy, Spain and
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 with over 10,000
billion
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euros
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.

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task response
Provide a clearer overview that summarizes the key trends or comparisons amongst the data in the diagrams before going into details.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the figures mentioned are accurate and use consistent terminology; for instance, identify 'bondholders' explicitly.
coherence and cohesion
Refine the language usage to improve grammatical accuracy; for example, avoid phrases like 'Greek owes the highest from Germany' and use 'Greece owes the most to Germany'.
task achievement
You successfully included specific figures to support your points, which is commendable.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a logical flow when describing the different bondholders and Eurozone members.

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