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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
number
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 of individuals who were born in
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Australian
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Australia
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 and were not in three different
areas
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 (urban, rural, and town) in 1995 and 2010.
Overall
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, the
cities
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 were the most popular
areas
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 that
Australian
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people
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 and
foriegners
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foreigners
 lived in both 1995 and 2010. The percentage of living in
cities
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 increased in both
group
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groups
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 of
people
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 whilst the proportion of those who live in towns and rural
areas
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 dropped over time with a bigger change in rural. The
number
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 of citizens who were born in
Australia
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 and
outside
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living in urban increased over time from around 50% to over 60% and 60% to 80% respectively.
This
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 made
cities
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 the largest
number
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 of
people
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 in both years. In 1995,
areas
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 outside
cities
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 and towns were the second largest
number
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 of living at approximately 30%
for
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of
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Australian
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people
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 and 40%
for
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of
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people
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 who were born
ourside
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outside
Australia
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. The popularity of
this
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 group dramatically declined to under 20% in 2010 and contributed to the lowest rank among all
areas
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.
Similarly
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, the percentage of individuals who were born in
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Australian
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Australia
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 and outside living in towns fell to under 20%.
However
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, the proportion of
people
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 born in
Australia
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 living in
this
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 area was still near the proportion of rural
areas
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 and a bit over for the
people
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 born outside
Australia
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, australian, areas, cities, people, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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