The given table ratio of students China gave commentary during in three years 2000,2005 and 2010.

The given table ratio of students China gave commentary during in three years 2000,2005 and 2010.
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The given table ratio of students
China
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in China
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gave commentary during in three
years
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2000,2005 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is
obviously
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obvious
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that,
amount
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the amount
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of pupils
contribute
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contributing
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good
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a good
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percentage for Technical Quality,Print
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and Electronic
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soared high significantly. The other two
expenditure
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expenditures
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,
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the exeption
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exeption
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exception
exemption
of
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for
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building
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the building
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changed slightly, because
teaching
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the teaching
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facilities are stable.
Expanding
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The expanding
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of
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apply
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part of
students
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students'
student's
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votes for Print
Resources
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showed
on
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apply
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its
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apply
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87% and preceded Technical
Resources
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about
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by about
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22 percentages in
first
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the first
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year. Electronic
Resources
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increased every five
years
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during all decade.
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Range
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The range
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of
modules
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offered changed during ten
years
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with its decreasing, 2-3 % difference. According
o
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to
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the table, all facilities increased during five
years
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,
exeption
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exception
exemption
of
Range
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of
modules
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offered and building. One of them underwent
slight
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a slight
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down,
other
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the other
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was unchanged from 2000 to 2010. The result of represents table Technical Quality and
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range
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the range
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of
modules
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offered
are
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apply
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slightly
decrease
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decreased
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in 2005 and
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range
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the range
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of
modules
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offered fell again
2010
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in 2010
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only
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by only
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3 %.
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Finally
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Finally,
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in 2010 Print
Resources
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and Electronic
Resources
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are
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were
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levelled
of
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off
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.
Building
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The building
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became stable.
While
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Technical Quality rose
6
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by 6
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%,
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range
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the range
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of
modules
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offered decreased
5
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by 5
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% during the ten
years
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, resources, range, modules with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "ratio" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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