The given bar graph represents agricultural goods in two different regions of the land

The given bar graph represents agricultural goods in two different regions of the land
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The given bar graph represents agricultural goods in two different regions of the land
The given bar graph represents agricultural goods in two different regions of the land. There are include Eastern
Region
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and Western
Region
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of the country.
Overall
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, the East
Region
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gets
Verb problem
has
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high
Correct article usage
a high
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level
in
Change preposition
of
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diurnal products and
vegetables
Change the noun form
vegetable
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production
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,
while
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he
Correct your spelling
the
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Western
Add a missing verb
has one
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one
Correct determiner usage
a
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syperiority
Correct your spelling
superiority
priority
in grain
production
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.
Nevertheless
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, they were equal
produced
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in produced
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meat. Obviously,
Eastern
Correct article usage
the Eastern
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one is the most important indicates in meat manufacture, but the Western differed its the most grain produce.
According to
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the chart, the grain gained
superior
Correct article usage
a superior
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percentage in the West, so
lead
Wrong verb form
led
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the way with 45%. So
that
Correct word choice
apply
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it prevailed Eastern grainy only 30%.
However
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, in Western
production
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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fewest
Correct article usage
the fewest
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vegetables, which was indicated only five
percent
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per cent
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, but
Eastern
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in Eastern
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vegie
Correct your spelling
vegetables
more
Correct quantifier usage
apply
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15% than Western.
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Also
Add a comma
Also,
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Western daily
production
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was half as much as the East, approximately 15%. Meanwhile, meat
production
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was
same
Correct article usage
the same
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in both countries.
The both
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Both
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Use synonyms
region
Fix the agreement mistake
regions
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were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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produced 35 %.
Consequently
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, both of the land
was consumption
Wrong verb form
consumed
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not only
same
Correct article usage
the same
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but
also
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different, too.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words region, production with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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