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Write a letter to a hotel manager in another city for an upcoming 2-day business trip for you and your colleagues. Introduce yourself and colleagues Give information about the business meeting Tell other requests you might have

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter, in
regards
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 to the upcoming 2-day business meeting which is to be held in your hotel
premisses
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premises
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 in China with my colleagues. My self is Deeshan Bandara, the owner of a clothing brand which was established in Australia. One of my
collegues
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colleagues
are
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is
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 attending the event from Russia
who
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and
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 was recognized as a well-known risk manager around the world. The
second
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,
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 is my business manager in China who is responsible for the operations that are within the
chinese
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Chinese
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main-land
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mainland
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. We are keen to discuss a few matters that
were
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 affecting sales at the moment
due to
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pandemic
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the pandemic
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 situation and remedial actions that we have to input in order to minimize the effect on the company profile. Basically, the aim is to conduct a risk analysis and a comprehensive future program for the brand name.
Lastly
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, I would need a
quite
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quiet
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 room for three people for a meeting which could
last
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 for 8 hours during the day, including a TV screen or a
projecter
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projector
 wall in which we can show a presentation. I might need some refreshing meals and drinks during the session and I hope that you
would
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 provide me
the
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 prices as per my request. Looking forward to hearing from you.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Deeshan.

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language
Ensure to use correct phrasing. Instead of 'My self is,' use 'My name is.'
coherence
Try to use clearer transitions between ideas to enhance the flow of the letter.
task achievement
Make sure to mention the hotel name where appropriate, as it adds a personal touch.
task achievement
You have clearly identified the purpose of your letter and provided relevant details about the meeting.
coherence
The closing of your letter was polite and appropriate, showing professionalism.
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