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The charts below illustrate which of 3 fast food restaurants were the most preferred amongst teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 and predictions for 2027. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below illustrate which of 3 fast food restaurants were the most preferred amongst teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 and predictions for 2027. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts compare the
popularity
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 of 3
fast
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fast-food
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food
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 restaurants among
teenagers
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 in
Vietnam
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 and
Indonesia
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 in 2017 and the prediction
of
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for
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 2027.
Overall
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, in
Vietnam
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, in 2017,
Burger
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 King was the most popular fast
food
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 restaurant,
however
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,
Mcdonald
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's will be the most popular in 2027. In
Indonesia
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,
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Mcdonald's
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McDonald's
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 is the most popular restaurant in both years. The
popularity
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 of
Burger
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 King was
more
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higher in
Vietnam
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 than in
Indonesia
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. In
Vietnam
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, in 2017, 43.1% of
adolescents
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 preferred
Mcdonald
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's, and in 2027, the
popularity
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 of
Mcdonald
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's will increase and 57.4% of
adolescents
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 will prefer
Mcdonald
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's. Meanwhile,
Burger
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 King was the most popular fast
food
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 restaurant in
Vietnam
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 in 2017, and 52.8% of
adolescents
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 preferred
Burger
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 King.
However
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, in 2027, the
popularity
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 of
Burger
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 King will be decreased significantly and 39% of
teenagers
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 will prefer
Burger
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 King. In
Vietnam
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, in the
year
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years
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 2017 and 2027, 4.1% and 6.3%
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adolescents
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of adolescents
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KFC
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. In
Indonesia
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, 60.8% of
adolescents
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 preferred
Mcdonald
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's in 2017, and in 2027, its
popularity
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 will decline and 48.5% of
teenagers
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 will prefer Mcdonalds.
in
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 2017, 23.8% of Indonesian
adolescents
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 prefer
KFC
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,
however
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, the
popularity
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 of
KFC
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 will rise significantly, and in 2027, 39.2% of Indonesian
teenagers
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 will prefer
KFC
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. The least popular fast
food
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 in
Indonesia
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 among
teenagers
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 is
Burger
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 King and in 2017, 15.4% of
teenagers
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 preferred
Burger
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 King. In 2027, it will decrease slightly and 12.3% of
teenagers
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 will prefer
Burger
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 King.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words popularity, food, teenagers, vietnam, indonesia, burger, mcdonald, adolescents, kfc with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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