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Band 4.5

Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words

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CEOs
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 and higher management levels are the leaders of companies. Not only the skills and experiences that those
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level
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 should have more than
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the operation
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level
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 but they
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 have higher responsibilities.
This
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 essay will explain how I totally agree with the statement.
Company
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 organization consists of many levels of employees, it is undeniable that we always give
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priority to
CEOs
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 and executive levels because they are the
one
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 who lead
company
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 directions and drive for execution to achieve
company
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target
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.
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,
CEOs
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 and management tasks are not generally
as
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at
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 an operation
level
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, most of their focus is based on
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company
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 budget and they have to deal with internal and external
factor
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factors
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. I was
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experienced
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 being a Vice president assistant and I found that in the meeting, it is not easy to perform the best practice as a Vice president to convince
for
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the stakeholder’s approval. It was very tough to finetune a WIN-WIN situation. I
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 realized that there
are
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 a lot of pressure when a wrong decision
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 made
in
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executive
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the executive
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level
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.
CEOs
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is
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are
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 the first focus that have to
take
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response
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 to resolve whatever problem
happened
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. For
instant
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, when there
were
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economic
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an economic
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 crisis and
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company
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a company
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 needed to decide how to cut
the
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expenditure
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expenditures
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and
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company
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need
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 to cut some staff
member
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members
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 to reduce
the
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cost
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costs
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.
CEOs
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 must have a very clear vision and
a
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good communication to convey the negative message for the minimum impact. Those activities need very high skills from
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 to make it through. From the mentioned reasons, I definitely agree that it should not be argued for
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 and executive
group
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groups
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 to get higher pay.

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coherence
Improve the logical flow of ideas by ensuring that each paragraph clearly connects to your thesis statement and each other. Consider using more cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas.
task response
The essay presents a clear opinion and provides reasons to support that opinion, which is commendable.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • executive compensation
  • income disparity
  • corporate governance
  • incentive structures
  • ethical considerations
  • competitive advantage
  • demotivation
  • pay structures
  • social inequality
  • talent acquisition
  • company culture
  • economic impact
  • leadership roles
  • employee morale
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