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Band 4.5

Write a letter to the company. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like to do and say what experience and skills you have

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Dear Sir, I hope you are doing well. My name is Jashanpreet Kaur and
i
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 have
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a Master
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Master
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Master's
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 degree in MATHEMATICS. and I am writing
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 letter to inform you about my interest in
Dispactch
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Dispatch
cordinator
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coordinator
Job
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. Actually, I am
seeking
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looking
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 for
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job
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, because I have pretty much good
experince
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experience
 4 years in
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feild
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field
. So, I think
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 will be
good
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a good
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opprotunity
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opportunity
 for me to
purse
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pursue
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in
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apply
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this
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job
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.
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,
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 more than 4 years
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of
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 experience, I have
good
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 grip
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on
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 all dispatch
skills
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ans
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and
 tasks, which would be very fruitful for
you
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 company's growth. Explaining
ths
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the
this
skills
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 that I have, I have good communication
skills
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 which enhance my confidence and
i
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 can be good
prentable
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presentable
 in any meetings, typing listening all
basics
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basic
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skills
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 I have,
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 of
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i
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 have dispatch certification. I hope you will consider my
qualification
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qualifications
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 and certification for
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job
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. Hoping prompt response
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this
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 letter! Yours
Sincerelu
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Sincerely
, Jashan

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly conveys your purpose for writing and your main credentials up front.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer transitions between sentences to help your ideas flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread for spelling mistakes and grammatical errors to enhance clarity and professionalism.
task achievement
You have effectively introduced yourself and stated the position you are interested in, which sets a clear context for your letter.
task achievement
Your enthusiasm for the role is evident, which is important in a cover letter and can leave a positive impression.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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