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Given maps illustrate information on how Frenton changed over 32 years between 1990 and 2012. There is High Street passing through the Frenton from south to north and on both sides of the street there are some public buildings, houses and flats.

Given maps illustrate information on how Frenton changed over 32 years between 1990 and 2012. There is High Street passing through the Frenton from south to north and on both sides of the street there are some public buildings, houses and flats.
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The two blueprints provide data on the renovations that have occurred in
Frenton
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 between 1990 and 2012.
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, in 2012, there were fewer green areas and
Frenton
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 has more residential buildings when compared to the past. Starting with the new establishments at the left side of
Frenton
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, the playing field at the top left of the map has been removed to accommodate apartment buildings.
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, the bank beside the school was rebuilt into a restaurant and the trees at the bottom left have been cut down to build a technopark.
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, the hospital was enlarged to serve more people. Turning to the new infrastructure
at
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on
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 the right side of
Frenton
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, more flats were erected and the section that was once allocated to houses has been demolished to build apartment complexes.
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, the cafe and park were turned
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 a hotel and golf resort. The theatre and the shops have been modernized into a cinema and a supermarket respectively. Regardless of the changes done, the library, the school, and the high street road remained intact

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words frenton with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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